So I think that I don't really have a style because it just a bit of everything some old stuff and some new stuff. All I can see is clothes all over my floor dirty plates on my bed side table. The darker colors in my room are mainly my wardrobe doors and my duvet, my duvet is black, grey and a dark orange. Because its too big to get out the door and it sits almost in front of my door and we cant get it out and I hate it. The cushions on my bed are very soft and have a sponge texture. The polaroid camera doesn't have anywhere else to go so it just sits on my desk. squishy, soft, lumps and bumps. I like how you used brackets and capital letters to make words stand out, Your Spelling is good Molly. And for the final part of my bedroom the accessories. I noticed that most of your words you could spell right. Personally would like a orange feature wall in my bedroom but when you're renting a house you have to have permission to do so. My mum sees I have to clean my room each day. My bed has a wooden bed frame that comes up tall where my head is and not so tall where my feet are. DVD, TV) and add comas in some places. Nevertheless your writing is lyrical, has rhythm and engages the reader. Love the story love the writer the use of strong, adventurous adjectives eg horrifically untidy, musty, unfresh, and colour descriptions eg bright red, light, creamy, dark coloured are great. The size of my bedroom is actually the right size. Good story I enjoyed reading it. This is where I do my homework. My bed takes up about one quarter of my room and is stationed next to the northern wall of my room. The bit that gets me, is how can one person be so messy?! Emma's bedroom. The view in spring is amazing as all of the plants have flowered and the perfume of these flowers is often in my room. All together I love my room because it is how I want it, its layout is how i want it, its smells okay,the accessories are good, and the theme is perfect. Your descriptive writing has a 'quirky' sense of humour in it showing good 'personal voice'. Right as you walk through the door you will notice the feature wall, its brown background with white and dark green flowers on it. Usually before I go to bed there is a glass of water and the book Im reading. Personally I love all the things in my bedroom but just not the way they are set out. The size of my bed is a king single. This means I get most of the afternoon sun. It is a stationary calamity! I like black and white because it doesn't make the room feel too bright and the way it is placed and I like it that way. My bedroom is a very new addition to the world, like how its layout is not even final and having barely any furniture. My room is the best room in my house I think this because of the warmth and the softness in it, (mostly my bed) I would like to give you a tour about my queen size bed. JAMES BEDROOM I like my bedroom just the way it is. Compare your house to somewhere else where you also feel those feelings that you can feel every time you step in your front door whether its relaxation, comfort, escape, or even boredom! The crossword clue possible answer is available in 3 letters. 4+. The laws don't apply to my imagination except for the time to clean your room law. The best part about having a themed bedroom is that it makes me more relaxed when I come home from a long day at school. My bedroom is right down the end of our hall way which is normally good because I cant hear the noise being made in the kitchen. A typical-sized pond is also viewable, although you must be up much closer to see the timid fish hiding under the pondweed. My books are bright and colourful so they stand out, all of them are different colours. I have a black carpet with a white lines diagonally going through it. People say their home But there are disadvantages to having a small room. In my bedroom standing in the doorway looking at it. I have a single bed in the opposite corner of my room. oh lick that creamy cock, Below you will understand what is important, the idea provides one of the links with an exciting site: mercy smart square. When did organ music become associated with baseball? A lumpy duvet lies messily on the thick mattress that cradles me at night. The biggest most horrifically untidy thing about my room is the floor. My bedroom has 4 walls and in one large window on the south-west side. I liked your ideas, you thought of ideas then typed in down on your google doc. The bed is the main part of any bedroom because that's where everyone spends the most time. It use to be an old garage but was renovated into a bedroom that Im proud to call it mine. I liked how you had good ideas in your writing but you didn't have that many. All of the furniture is pretty old for example the punk bed is about five years old and the dresser is about eight but its still in good condition. I made my bedroom the way I wanted it and set it up the way I liked it. My desk is crammed in the top right hand side my draws right next to it. A normal room for a 13 year old. I would say that the overall style of my bedroom is light and modern. Reading and studying books across the studying bench and on the side table. It's a very accurate description and well written but the mess is very understated! Looking a bit further up you can see a sky light, the plastic that covers it from the reflective tube in the attic isnt fastened properly so if somebody slams a door somewhere it vibrates and makes such a commotion. And my tall and thin window opposite the door as you come in which is my main source of light in the day. State of my Bedroom.The state of my bedroom is well atrocious there's a mountain there and a another one over there. I enjoyed the comparison you made between the mess and cleanliness. Your mother might say this if they come home and see that youve left all your toys lying out. I could clearly see your room just by the way you described it. Great descriptive writing Christopher, you went deep into a lot of detail about your living space and colours. Jessie, I liked the length of the paragraphs and the descriptive words that you put in. Don't forget punctuation. Sophies Bedroom Great writing. On the other side of the room is my chair with my blanket that fades from blue to white. My bedroom is located at the back of my house halfway down the hall. Right in front of you as you walk in is my blue patterned desk with my small, white basketball hoop hanging above. I love my room and I always will but it does have some bad thing about It but I still love it. 4, I like how you describe where the objects in your room where. My clothes they are placed in piles beside the wall because my dad has not got any draws for the room. Keep up the good work. A metaphor for home explains your feelings about your home by using figurative language. From my green reading lamp to my dart board, my patterned roman blinds and funky hooks on the wall. This is placed flush against the left hand wall and is filled with many treasures. 4+, Nice work describing your room. The next best thing about my bedroom is the accessories that make the room mine. Also I have bad eyesight so It Is really hard to see my tv from my bed. eg Self fun. You have used some very good descriptive words which fit perfectly into what you were writing about. Secondly, the wall decorations. My room has a fresh air smell and, in the morning you can hear the birds chirping outside, if you were to walk into my room it would be clean and tidy just the way I like it. I love it because it is the only room in my house where I can lock myself away from the rest of the world. Thanks for dropping by. Because most people feel most at ease at home, then you can make this comparison to show youre the opposite of them. NSL: be more bold with good words to catch the readers attention and to take them on a journey. My room is not the most spectacular, but it is the one place that I can call my own. You have got great vocabulary, I didn't really see anything that wrong. I like it this way because it's bright and colourful. To call your home a dump is to say that its a complete mess! there is a tree outside my bedroom window. Very good description i could imagine i'm there.Very good punctuation. You have described some things though. Great writing Shadyn really liked it, I still ant that ps4 of yours though! Also some of you words are slept wrong or used in the wrong context. All kinds of blue from baby blue to electric blue to sky blue - there is a lot of blue. Lots of vivid detail and descriptions Piper! I also enjoy the way that my room is positioned and how it looks (when it's tidy). My bed it doesn't get made and the sheet is on the floor. I try make my room a beach theme because I love going to the beach. Christina Moses Weight Loss, No one can get in except for me. My bedroom looks, smells and feels great. Hannahs Bedroom And I have dirty plates on my floor because when I get home from school I will get something to eat then go lay on my bed, then I forget to take them out of my room. My room has an area where I keep drawing and pictures, an area for me to keep my collections. My bed layout is in the corner of the room with a bit of space in the middle of the room. Even though my room hasnt got much in it, my room is the tidiest bedroom there. In my room I have a book on my beside table that I am reading and I have books in my wardrobe that I have already read or need to be read. There is smelly rugby gear, warm ski gear and dirty clothes all over the floor. The only errors I could see was that you wrote picture instead of pictures. My room has a hint of rotten food in it to make sure my sister will stay out and it has smelly clothes all over the floor. Most of my accessories are very modern as same are made out of glass or clay. When I sit in bed with my eyes peeking out of my blanket it makes me wonder if something scary is hiding behind the box. your story of your bed room is really good i like your volcabarere in it i really liked your story next time you could work on double check your work for spelling errors well done, I really like this Connor! Teatukuras bedroom The colours in my room are bright with my duvet which is mixed with bright light colour then there is my light blue curtains hanging by a Dark aqua chair. Although this also gets used by my sister who also THOMASS BEDROOM It lies to the left of the monitor on the desk and is covered with old homework and empty cups. Feedback - It's good that you have the nouns and you have a bit of detail in them but add more. Some names needed capitals. Then there's the senses - smell, sight, sound, touch. There is a leather chest that I dump all my clothes on, and a bunch of tools and motorbike gear in the gray shelving unit. Feed-forward - You had nouns but boring adjectives 'A computer that is big and fun' add more description to it 'Speakers that are loud' it's too boring be more interesting. The simplest way to make a metaphor is to use this pattern: First noun + to be verb + a/an + second noun She is an angel. But I enjoyed reading this but you keep spelling "color" the wrong way it's "colour.". This was both literal and metaphorical in the movie Shrek where the ogre Shrek lived in a swamp. I give a 4. Your Bedroom Ideas are very elaborated and the descriptive part of it has been written very well. I also have a painting of Clifton Beach (where we lived in Australia) that I did with a friend, it is hanging over my bed. Senses are all over the show when it comes to my room. There is a big black shoebox beside my bed which fits all my shoes in it. My room has two windows, one facing south, the other west. as your room! I have a double bed,white covers and matching pillows to my starry bed which is navy blue and white spots sprinkled all over It. I have two paintings in my room, one of a cat with glasses on and one of two dogs in a mug (these still need to be put up). Being next to it gives me a warm feeling. Again, were applying the feelings of being at home (relaxation and comfort) to some other situation and achieving this by making a comparative metaphor. Good job, I like how you described your basketball posters. Roman blinds with large, bold coloured birds of many forms. Love Mum x. DOOGIES BEDROOM Apart from blue the other colour that makes a common appearance is white as my walls, bedside table and shelves are white washed. So over all the 4 main things that i love about my room are style , layout ,accessories and furniture. Im at home in the forest uses those associations we have of home (comfort, relaxation) and apply them to the outdoors. Running down the old wooden corridor a floorboard squeaked underneath my pounding feet. The set up in my room. I have a table in my room strewn with fly tying equipment and materials, it shows that I like fishing. The final part of the room is the space, the space of the room is kinda small which is a good thing because that mean that I can do cool ping pong trick shots. Good description of your bedroom (mess and all). This situation becomes extra annoying in the afternoon, where the sun is falling down to the horizon, which makes is way too bright when Im sitting at my desk and doing homework. Its a 2-door car with gray rim color and custom white tires. This makes our room one of the darkest rooms in our house. I have a white bedside table with an alarm clock, a rose red touch lamp, and a blue bluetooth speaker. September 2014. My favorite place in the whole house, my space, my pride and joy, my happy place where I spend most of my time. This answers first letter of which starts with S and can be found at the end of Y. I pull it out when friends come to stay. Just above my table are shelves were put things like books and trophies. My room is not too empty but its not too full either. Sheep are dotted around a field of copious green, munching greedily away. The storage is great because it is hidden away above my wardrobe, which is built into the wall, although most of my stuff goes under the bed. I give you a 4. The movie is about a family trying to save their home (their castle) from developers who are trying to forcibly take it off them. You have missed out on some things ie. Four dark grey walls. The fresh air circulates the room which gives me a sense of new and relaxation. Most of the ideas are elaborated equally. I love the way in which you used senses, This is great. Next step is to read it over to correct punctuation like needed and unneeded capitals and use of commas. Down one side of it there are five drawers also filled with special items and on the bottom there is another drawer which is filled with gemstones. There's flower patterns everywhere and unique designs on my furniture. I love my bedroom and I wish you guys could see it person so you can see how and why I love my bedroom. In my wardrobe I have shelves for my books and drawers for all my clothes. The mirror is directly in line with my bed so it was scary when I had just watched a horror movie about the urban legend Bloody Mary and had to go to sleep. Very descriptive and easy to imagine your bedroom and feel how special it is to you. JESS'S BEDROOM DESCRIPTION It's very clean and healthy room,well it wouldnt be clean without my mother, of course, sometimes you just need her to boss you around. My bedroom, my bedroom is like my very own house all to me, no-one is allowed in without permission except the cat and dog (mainly the cat). My layout has nowhere to move, but I love it the way it is. The cleanliness of my room is not good at all. It is mostly a cool breeze that feels like the ocean air. A midnight black bedside table to go with the other colours in the house and also to go with the short stack that is my other set of drawers that has felt blue and green draws. The tv, my tv is a black 32 inch philips tv which is about 9 years old but It's still works good. As you walk into my room, the first things that you will see is my bed. The primary metaphor is the most basic of metaphors. In fact I love my bedroom it is the best. They are happy to enjoy the predictable lives they have, rather than search for an exciting purpose in their existence. Over all I thought it was great with little mistakes. We're i can't use it when i'm in my bed! Across from that is an immense window, and finally, a built in wardrobe, containing various unfolded garments. Did you use a dictionary?If not Excellent spelling. It all fits nicely in my room and nothing looks too squished. My duchess is across from my bed flat against the left hand wall. Theirs the unbearable feeling of not being able to find anything and always having to resort to yesterday's old grungy smelly shirt that you chucked on the floor after you got home the day before, or just having to use week old socks by spraying deodorant on them so they don't smell bad because you seemed to have misplaced every other pair. Some of your words are a little bit repeated. The pattern is bad, It is a circle and 2 squiggly lines that run beside it and keep doing the same thing until it reaches the roof. My bed is really soft and comfy, just the way I like it. It sounds like the perfect place to go after school or work and feel comfortable and relaxed. Im a bit compulsive, whereas is Sam is often tired or moody, so the room not only has the consistency of Two-Face in cleanliness, but will also resemble him; one half dark, messy and overall ugly, one half clean, clear and less ugly. Other than for sleeping I use my bedroom to do my homework (at my desk), catch up with all the goss on social media and of course as a space to be alone for a little while. Secondly call of duty gaming gear,(That's what I like to call it) such as posters and other related gaming gear, heres a list of the gear that I have, I have a whole load of PlayStation accessories and computer accessories like a mouse that lights up saying call of duty, my keyboard does the almost exact same thing instead it lights up, c, a, l flashes, o, f, d, u, t and y my PlayStation is not so great all it has is a sticker of call of duty on it. That is why I think my bedroom is the best place in the house. Not too big that it's not cozy, and not too small it's cramped. On the right hand wall you will see a dark sea green feature wall, the others a subtle black white. The drawers hold all my hair ties, my sunglasses and headphones and stationary. Lv 7. MY BEDROOM! The jewelry box once belonged my wonderful Mother. I liked how you added a lot of description, like about the wall paper. A very well written and descriptive piece. It might not be your typical 13 year old bedroom because it's a spare room. There is a slight problem with my room. My king-single bed is placed directly in the middle of my room with my dresser, containing all of my clothes, on the left hand side. William I liked your descriptive words and the structure of your paragraphs. Grade rating 4, your editing was really really good i could not see anything misspell or no comma or anything so well well done. your bedroom is like the inside of your head (simile). However you could of used more of it like putting commas in longer sentences. The detective listened to her tales with a wooden face. However some of your paragraphs didn't make any sense. The darkness at specific times, so as I said it can get dark fast, I have to use my lighting module just to make it look like its still daylight, it gets annoying sometimes, you just got home and you go in your room and you cant find the light (By the way my hallway light is a sensor light). The temperature of the room is balanced. My room has many accessories, there is pictures, paintings, plants and other things too. The carpet is a soft grey colour with a squishy texture. I think that it is still also good to keep using basic words. I think it is awesome you describe things in you bedroom so well and I saw it so clear in my head. There's really not much sound in my room at all, it's quiet and if you're lucky you can hear the animals outside. I use them both for school work (homework) or for other needs. My walls are a creamy white color they fit very well with my room. At the foot of my bed there is a built in wardrobe with lots of clothes and at the foot of my sisters bed theres the entrance to the room and the door to the en suite. Now you can go to your room and make it the way you want it and design it the way you like it. I have a lot of special objects in my bedroom. However there is only one change I can offer, that is a change of colour to a blue or a nice green, maybe even a feature wall. I'm jealous of your room too!! You had a lot of good ideas. The best bit is that I didnt even pick it.My bedroom sits at the front of the house looking over the road and into the sun. Annies Bedroom You used good description and your story was interesting. There is a famous song with the line Home is wherever Im with you. For next time you could use more vocabulary and try not to repeat words. Color, my room has color in the right spot my walls match my carpet the carpet matches the color of my beds wood underneath the mattress and my bed matches my dutchess. I like my room because it is my own space. Overall I love my room. My favourite rooms is my bedroom. Overall I love my room to pieces because it belongs to me. But you a lot of descriptive words. Well done Emma I could really picture your bedroom well use of spelling and I like the words you have used. My bedroom is facing west and is on the far side of the house. My bed is NEVER made properly, (unless mum makes it for me.) LEARNING WITH MRS STAPLES@ MT HUTT COLLEGE, METHVEN. Luckily for me I dont have much to tidy, unlike my brother. The mother has to handle all of these things, and is feeling like shes trying to coordinate a zebra, giraffe, and elephant, to all work in unison! You need to work on editing on your opening sentence. The best bit about our carpet is it is always warm from under floor heating. 2 long pillows sit on top of my bed behind a small, dark square pillow. It has quite a bit of mess on top of the cabinet and next to the cabinet is white and black draws which holds my books and other things and above the drawers is a colorful kite. What storms then shook the ocean of my sleep. When I walk into my bedroom I always love that feeling when it is so so warm that you just lay there and forget about everything. You did'n't go into detail about your furniture we don't know what patterns or colours they are. I have been in your room but I think you have to clean your room before a gest gets there a ha ha 4. I like the layout, colors, furniture and the style it has a red feature wall (my favorite color). Everyone wants to have the perfect bedroom, the best way to do that is to make it your own. TROYS BEDROOM Its got a squishy top. Chris Trousdale Cause Of Death, Your writing is very descriptive. 1. 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